From Christo Rigakos:
"I'd like to say that following your checklist from Writing
and Enjoying Haiku, has helped me polish up an old haiku I wrote many years
ago. The very first haiku I ever wrote was:
two empty chairs
facing each other
in silent conversation
After running down your checklist, I revised this as follows:
in silence
facing each other
empty chairs
I killed off the personification of
"conversation". Chairs don't converse. I think the imagery
of two empty chairs facing each other shows shasei, and the addition of
"in silence" hints at what is NOT there -"conversation", and
in a roundabout way sheds some light on this missing thing which comes as close
as possible to my original idea without the wordiness of the original haiku.
If you have some of your work you would like to share with us on this page, please e-mail your poems and or your comments to us.
Poems and Comments are Copyright © Designated
Authors 2007.
Page Copyright © Jane Reichhold 2007.
Homepage for Writing and Enjoying Haiku